Monday, October 18, 2010

Wish

The wide eyed school boy
Hides the drawing, as black
Ink drips, in his tainted hands.
He looks up, but no one
Has noticed; quiet in his corner,
He remains king.

As the window draws in
The light, he rocks his chair
Back and forth, to the tempo
Of the grandfather’s clock
Standing guard by the desk.

He follows
The shapes and figures
In the sky, building
His world of make belief.
Such is the longing escape
Yearning to break out.

And so the boy will grow
Too fast or too eager
To put his mark, to lend
His name, to the papers,
The kisses and the grand city lights.

But he will fall,
In sin and in love,
And like the rest of us
He will know sadness
And the best of times
As he rises a man.

Janete Cabral Copyright

24 comments:

Don said...

wow!

You're a great writer!

Harvey said...

Wonderful! That's all I can say -- wish I had written it first (LOL)

Janete said...

Hi Don

Thank you very much, come back and read some more ...lol!

Janete said...

Hello Harvey

glad you liked it...it's great when people can see what you see :)

Clyde said...

Thank you.
I enjoyed your poem very much
Guess I had better rad more of your posts
Talented lady

Janete said...

Hello Clyde


Thank you very much, it is great to have the nice encouragement.

Steve said...

I like the fact you've confined yourself to short syllables - it creates a sense of space which is very gentle. Usually short syllables tend to lead to very clipped ascerbic poems (as in some of Plath's work) but you've managed to keep a very gossamer feel to the poem. Nice one!

Lx said...

i adore this piece.
that's it.

-eve- said...

With this poem, as with many of your other ones, I feel a stillness... a quiet... I like that.:-)

Balsam Lane said...

Good stuff.

May I comment on the format? The capitalization of each line, in the poem layout, was a bit confusing.

Perhaps it is just the way Blogger formats things. With that said, good content.

Thanks for the poem.

Balsam

Janete said...

Hi Balsam Lane

Thanks for the comment, but I must assure it is not blogger but that I have chosen the format. Do you not use capitalization?

take care

Janete said...

Hello Eve

Thanks for coming back, hope all is well!

Janete said...
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Janete said...

Thank you lx...

Janete said...

Hi Steve!

thank you, glad you liked it and it worked.

Aayush Bhatnagar said...

hey, well done..gud goin !!

Anonymous said...

Wow! Impressive poetry. Wonderful...

Morgana
www.thunderbirdsky.com

Janete said...

Thank you Aayush, fot stopping by and the kind words

Janete said...

Hi Morgana!

too kind, but I appreciated...it's great that people enjoy it and let me know it.

Anonymous said...

This gives one a deep sense of the immense possibilities of childhood. Excellent.

Thank you.

Trée said...

Not sure how I missed this reading. Beautifully done! Wonderful to hear your voice read your own work, giving it flight. I think poems were meant to be read aloud. They become something different I think when given voice. This poem softens and enwraps like a blanket warm. So glad I didn't miss it. Have a wonderful weekend Janete.

Janete Cabral said...

Thank you Tre'e, I appreciate it.

I occasionally gather to courage to post and do a reading out loud. I know you do too.

Have a lovely weekend Tre'e!

Janete

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